Do these sentences make sense?
This poem made me think about the beauty and rarity of finding true love. The reason it made me think about this, is because when the narrator compares his beloved to the thunder of night, he is saying that their love is like a phenomenon in nature. It is a phenomenon in nature because thunder is rare to occur, but also beautiful when it happens, which is just like love. Therefore, thunder is like the rarity and beauty of finding true love.
This poem made me think about the beauty and rarity of finding true love. The reason it made me think about this, is because when the narrator compares his beloved to the thunder of night, he is saying that their love is like a phenomenon in nature. It is a phenomenon in nature because thunder is rare to occur, but also beautiful when it happens, which is just like love. Therefore, thunder is like the rarity and beauty of finding true love.
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Explanation:
The second sentence does not need the first comma. I would omit the word "when" because it should not go after "because." I would also omit "he is" because that signifies the start of an independent clause, and you have to separate two independent clauses with a comma and a coordinating conjunction.
"The reason it made me think about this is because the narrator compares his beloved to the thunder of night, saying that their love is like a phenomenon in nature."
Personally, I would also omit "which is just" in the third sentence because it is awkward.
"It is a phenomenon in nature because thunder is rare to occur, but also beautiful when it happens, like love."
