Hey! I feel bad for asking but could you make sentences and correct some of them in my outline? Thank you!!!

I. Intro: Differences and similarities between polish and american education
B. Thesis: Polish education and American education
II. Topic one: Polish and American education has certain differences in their systems
A. School system
1. Polad has 8 years of elementary school, than after it you can go to zdz which is only for you career or liceum where you continue your education, or technicum where you can finish both. After than you can go to college
2. United States has 8 years of elementary school, 4 years of high school and 2-6 years of college
B. Classes
1. While going to school in Poland you have the same people in class for each subject
2. In USA you have different people in all your classes
C. Freedom
1. Poland has many mandatory classes which you have to take and you have no options to avoid them
2. United States schools give you a ton of options and you can do what you want with your schedule
III. Topic two: Poland education can be similar to USA
A. Rules in school
1. Polish teachers are very strict but sometimes they let you eat in classes and use your phone. Everything depeds from teacher and class.
2. United States teachers are almost the same. Eating and using your phone classes depends from teachers.
B. Diploma
1. Polish education is very long and hard. If you don’t finish higher schools you can’t get well paid job.
2. American education is very similar too but you have a lot more options in jobs but if you don’t finish college then it's hard for you to get your dream job.
C. Home education
1. Students and their parents have a option for home education.
2. American students have also option for homeschooling.
IV. Conclusion: Between polish and american education is many differences but not many similarities.
A. Polish and American education comparison.

1 Answer
Mar 21, 2018

I'm not going to go through and correct every single one, but I will give you a few pointers.

Explanation:

Don't use words like it's (it is), don't (do not), etc. in formal writing. These are contractions and are informal.

Write in third person (no you, your, I, me, my, etc.). Use words like they, he, she, etc.

Write out the numbers (eight, six, four, etc.) unless they are dates.

Usually, these sort of papers have evidence from outside sources (don't forget to cite) and reasoning. I'm not sure what your requirements are, but if that's a requirement, make sure you have evidence and reasoning to support.

Figure out a thesis statement and your topic sentences for each paragraph. Since you have four main points, make sure all four (or a generalization of all four) are included in the thesis.