Is anyone willing to provide comments/feedback on my essay?

I know this is a different question than usual but I would highly appreciate it if anyone can provide feedback on my creative writing essay?

Thanks in Advance!

1 Answer

See below:


I've gone in and done some suggested edits. It's here:

I have no idea of how to save it to you aside from doing the link and hoping it can be saved over...

So what I didn't put in the edits is that I like the story and the style - it flows nicely and has a simple but sophisticated style. And I'd also like to say that although I suspect your first language isn't English, you are using it very well - there were a few things to clean up in that regard but overall it was good.