Can I create a sentence that says that a girls lassitude permeated throughout her?

Would that make sense?

1 Answer
Dec 15, 2016

Answer:

See explanation...

Explanation:

Almost, but there are some things to watch:

  • "girls" will need an apostrophe to indicate ownership. So you could write something like: "The girl's lassitude..." or "Jane's lassitude..."

  • The word "throughout" is redundant. "Permeated" already implies "throughout".

  • Since lassitude tends to imply passivity, perhaps it would be more appropriate to make the girl the passive object of the sentence, e.g. "Lassitude permeated Jane".